Ive popped the content into a google doc:
https://docs.google.com/a/pirateparty.org.au/document/d/1Il0frHsQV2slhzGma_woc92p5hWdZGKjuDzyrNC71sk/edit?usp=sharing (stuff that appears in pop up dialogs etc are in table cells below the content that refers to them)
Hopefully this may help in editing content without worrying about the markup.
as far as dot points. I felt that going dot points might make it easier going for non-tech readers etc. This was mainly in an attempt to try and simplify everything as far as possible. Ive always perceived the target audience as relative ‘noobs’, so aiming for as simplified as possible with the intent of linking off to other existing guides and resources as far as possible. So that this is more an overview with particular focus on how it relates to data retention.
If anyone feels that paragraphs works better than dot points feel free to edit/swap/replace etc, im not attached to anything at this stage and much of the original pad content was superior but there’s so much across the board that i was just looking at seeing what could be culled/simplified.
Everything still all needs to be proof read etc, and theres still gaps to fill too. and yeah, lots of it could possibly be ditched.
As far as the content, a lot of it is from multiple authors and ive mainly been concentrating on getting it into a single thing like this, but text definitely needs revision (the stuff i wrote/added last night is even full of typos etc still that i haven’t gotten around to fixing yet)
Im more than happy for anyone to tailor the scope of this etc, and be brutal on culling bits out or rewording or changing how it reads etc. Now there’s the google doc format, will that help in the content editing aspect for others as well?
The written content overall certainly lacks a ‘consistent voice’, but i was aiming that that would be fixed in proof reads/rewrites etc
Oh, re Ad tracking etc, a method the NSA uses to follow/track people is by piggybacking surveillance on stuff like Google’s ‘supercookies’ and other advertising cookie type things. How that all relates to the specific Australian experience with data retention isnt entirely clear. If we do include a section on this, an explanation of this and why etc would be helpful, but yeah, we have no such content in there as yet.
Oh yeah, the opening probably sounds like a press release because I think i lifted it from our press release.
heheh
again, not attached to it, could very much do with a rewrite for this purpose.